A shiver went through my body i screamed cookie monster shut the door well at least i had my 20 dollars i found in the meadow and did you know what happened sally went past and stole it i barged down the hallway to my room. I flopped on my bed and went to sleep. I didn't wake up for 2 years. after that 2 years of sleeping i got a job at a supermarket and that is the end of my story i can’t say anymore because the rest still hasn’t happened yet.
why: i have added good words and i know where to use them.